Board Thread:Roleplaying/@comment-38113021-20190323232505/@comment-38113021-20190606234540

Booming voice

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM

I nodiced that I would be nice if we learn a bit of what the charictors look like and there names. Maybe I skipped over it but just a bref sentance will do. Like this "My fur was a dusty brown. It was longer then most wolves with a patch of white on the forhead" Or "My fur was a rich brown. It was shorter then most wolves and I had no star of white on my forhead, like my mother"

I realy liked the idea of the evil mother. You dont have to follow what I say, but maybe you find out a bit later? maybe the main charictor gets suspicus, then the mother does somthing nice and the main charictor forgets about the suspicion. Then B00M, evil mother revealed. Main charictor is worried who to trust.

COuld you tell us why everyone was so frightened by the main charictor? Maybe a bad reputaion because a family member betryed the pack?

These are just my idea's that you dont have to follow.