Talk:Twilight Fortress/@comment-39615662-20200118062521

mm uh i didn't have time to read everything, its late at night but here's what i got out of it.

okay so i hardly read your writing cause its not really my thing, and uh this is really my first impression

i think you need to work on expressing their personalities more, because otherwise i seriously do not care about the characters and its just a really short story that seems like you didn't really try much

please dont @ me this is just my opinion