Talk:Mr.new jammer: an aj creepypasta/@comment-26863232-20170710024450

Pretty good for a first creepypasta. May I ask to provide criticism?

Well, actually, I'll put it here anyway.

CRITICISM WARNINGZ PLZ DONT KIL MEH


 * Try to capitalize.


 * Add some more description.  For example, describe the wolf more, or what you felt.\

CRITICISM END

Overall, I'd rate this 3 stars because I liked the 'foreshadowinggggggg' scene with Wretched and stuff. Also, it actually sounds somewhat possible instead of being really stupidly random.