Talk:Infinity Jam - An Animal Jam CreepyPasta/@comment-31191359-20171122064831

It could be improved, Especially this part.

" I got a seizure. Now I am dead because some strangers killed me with a knife on real life. I shouldn't log in. I shouldn't do that. Now I'm in a good place, a long way out of this ''Red code"."

But otherwise, it's good. Just gonna point out the things wrong with that part.

"Now I am dead" Is out of place. It would be better as "I had died, some strangers killed me in reality, I shouldn't log it, I shouldn't. Now I am in a better place, A long way away from this "Red code"." But otherwise, Amazing.

9/10