Talk:Portraits/@comment-39615662-20191016053147

Congratulations on making an actual decent creepypasta. This is probably as good as you can make an AJ-based creepypasta, because otherwise its just 'blood' and 'creepy jags' and whatnot. So, this wasn't cliche and I think the queasy feeling this left me with is going to lurk in my dreams.

But, hey, proves this story actually had some impact, even if so small.

So, yeet. Mah dude, this is really well-written. The only slight problem is that everything happens a bit too fast. Maybe try adjusting it so you more vividly describe this? I'm really hard to catch the attention of and I found it difficult to follow along the story without staring blankly and saying, "wait, what just happened?" But I'm hyperactive anyway and I have ADHD, so that's not you're fault. I'm just bein' annoying here. Keep writing, I love your work.