Talk:Unveiling The Plot (It Was Bigger Than We Expected)/@comment-27070860-20190618202711

You sure like your cliff-hangers, don’t ya~?

I can only give you compliments thus far, since I seem to be enjoying the story for the most part. The dialogue seems pretty fluid and has a nice flow to it, and adding action into the story doesn’t really seem like a problem for you since it’s nicely paced and doesn’t seem like you’re in a hurry to get anywhere, which I really enjoy. My only pet peeve is the alpha’s being presented as being on equal footing as Red- I’m really into the idea that the alphas are above the average jammer (which I’m guessing Red isn’t, considering the fact that she lit the trident crimson and levitated it away from an alpha. As well as, you know, her being the protagonist of the story xp) but I’m slowly warming up to your take on the alphas~

Anyways, as I already said before, good luck with the following chapters, and don’t feel the need to rush with writing them- rushing never gets you anywhere~