Talk:Jamaaliday Illusion.../@comment-26502668-20151205204745

I didn't feel any creepy vibe, but... Why didn't Major's parents have the time to get a job or something like that? Do you mind explaining that? Also, I find Major's backstory kind of clichè. Just some constructive criticism for future stories. My suggestion for future characters or villains is that they grow up a perfectly normal life until a sibling gets dangerously sick. The character/future villain kills them to 'stop the suffering' when his/her family could actually afford medicine - and they find pleasure in doing it. They then go insane - the rest is history!

Remember, it's just a suggestion for future characters - you don't have to copy the exact backstory, just do something similar to it or do something that isn't too  clichè. Other than that, the story's good! 7/10