Talk:The Fman122 Story/@comment-26863232-20170129004948

This story is pretty interesting, and I think it was good. However, I'd like to give some tips. Please do not take this as hate     :b .

1) Try add in some more description.  For example, "Fman122 was a jammer who always had something kind to say to others," or  "The hacker loved to cause pain."  Try refrain from saying the word 'nice', because it has a kinda negative meaning, such as "Eh.  They're nice."

2)  Give the characters some attitude, like describing Fman122 as 'caring but naive'.

3)  Try not to make a 'mary/gary sue' character, or an anti- mary/gary sue.


 * checks watch*

Uh.... I'm being too analytical again..... Welp, g'bye    :D.