Talk:The life of a chemist kid/@comment-43788761-20191017163217

The premise is kinda intriguing, but there are some major grammatical mishaps that become distracting very quickly.

For instance, if you have a plural noun followed by a verb, you normally should put an -ing an the end.

"Your parents only fly to Jakarta" becomes "Your parents ARE only flyING to Jakarta".

Another issue are tenses. You swap back and forth between past and present.

" When our parents worked in Dubai for 5 days and leaved us alone, we take care of ourselves. Some days feels like a nightmare. I was 12 at that time" should be, "When our parents worked in Dubai for 5 days and LEFT us alone, we COULD take care of ourselves, Some days FELT like a nightmare. I was 12 at that time".

I would have edited this for you, but since it's a contest I figured I'd ask you first. Let me know.

Cool start!