The Slaves of Darkness (remake of the slaves)

this is a remake of the story the slaves inspired by my sisters story Slave of the phantoms

chapter 1: Hated One
I could feel the last beats of my heart. locked up in a cell, tired hopeless broken. Why did i get myself into this mess why why why! I looked up with all my might, phantoms looked in the cells next to me and i slowly put my head down "so...r..r.y" i said and the last bit of me faded away.

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I walked down the halls of the fortress with a frown on my face. "i hated my life well "after life" i lived in jamaa with my friends and we would do dares with each other and one of my friends said to give some gems to a phantom so i did and why was i so stupid there was a big fat greely face on the front of the gem. and when i gave it to the phantoms they got mad and captured all of us. and my friends blamed all of it on me ME WHEN THERE THE ONES WHO TOLD ME TO DO IT"! DEATH HEART! dagger, the the phantom kings helper yelled. "what"! I snarled back and my name is amber not death heart! i yelled again. "first of all no yelling at your leader and i need you to Gard the slaves and make them do what they are flowing all the rules and one more thing amber was you animal name but death heart is your phantom name" dagger said and floated away.

(more to come :)