User blog comment:Henrythegreat4/Inkwell Story Contest Entry/@comment-27070860-20170702143242

I didn't exactly understand the begining (that was just the first line though) and maybe it would have also been a bit better if you were able to stretch it out, turn it a bit longer-but thats probably just my preferance, since i enjoy longer stories. but i enjoyed this nontheless- good job.