Talk:Creepypasta/@comment-24962818-20160106223820

Dear Arcues, this is laughable,

May offer some advice?

this story is bland and rather uncreative.

You are using bland and undrescriptive plot lines

" I clicked log off, and blood was all over the screen, SPLATTERED, and dead animals appeared everywhere. My pc started to print DEAD BLOOD with blood all over the paper. Then my pc got red springs springing out of the pc. I smelled it, it was blood! after hours, the research started to pay off."

this is kinda of a horror clcithe at this point.

"When I clicked log off"

You said log out was broken/turned off

how can you click it?

you admit the user is fake you just shot imersion in the head. it's hard to write good stories, I know, (mine suck) but you need to try not sticking to creepypasta norms and break from the mold and move AWAY from blood and gore.

Horror is not about being violent, it's about FEAR and EMOTIONS. If you just focous on being as bloody as possible, your story is dead on arival.

Stories such as Frankestien's Monster, and War of the World is frightning because they get you imersed in the stories, while most Creepypastas do not, involing thing come out of the game to kill.

Boring, uncreative, undescritve, and unimersiovie.

0/10 stars

or a dirt star