Talk:The Taken/@comment-32392816-20171222223843

8/10.

I'd reccomend using paragraphs. Before you ask me "what about The Phantom Slaves?" I'll do that when it's complete. You have some grammar errors, such as "the raccoons heads" where it should say "the racoons' heads". The plotline is good, but a little more backstory would be decent. Why was Proud the only fox ever to love Snowy? Readers enjoy the story more when questions like these are answered. Otherwise, amazing!