Thread:Wheatgerm/@comment-43836919-20200120172908/@comment-43788761-20200120175149

Okay, I'm going to be real with you. None of these really read like prologues. Almost all of them, with the exceptions of the first and fourth, aren't even long enough to be blurbs. They're premises. Prompts. And, really... quite a few of them hold elements from stories that have been written already. The first one could be an interesting start of something - the start of a paragraph, that is; not of a whole story. It needs more for that, because it sums up everything in just about two sentences. And the fourth? It's an odd amalgamation of past, present, and gratuitous ellipses.

I get that you're trying. And it's a nice effort. But it just. Needs. More.