Talk:Empty Servers/@comment-31473471-20170415013332

Here's some tips;

1. Try to make it a bit more unique, not cliché i might let it slide since it's you're first creepypasta though but do consider it next time.

2. Use a bit more descriptive words. Here's an example with the static.

The bitter sound of static grew larger, it soon screamed in my ear making them ring.

It'll make users feel like that they've stepped in the shoves of the protagonist.

3. Attempt to make it longer. What I mean by that is try to expand the main idea and add mini plots in chapters add a plot twist in a few.

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I rate it 7/10.

And I wasn't trying to be mean with the tips.