Talk:The Killer Lynx/@comment-30249217-20151226124423

5/10

This was really good, though there were horrible cliches in it. And it was to short

Cliches:

1.  I used it all up until I had 10 diamonds left. So, I bought a lynx and when I tried to change it, it was all bloody and had bloodshot eyes. I decided not to pay attention so I headed to my den instead.

Okay this doesn't make sense, as I would've quit the game.

2.  Then I noticed they were the CCA (Cursed Clan of Animals)

Like 1., this doesn't make sense unless you've experienced them before/ seen them on a video (etc)

This is a good pasta for a beginner, but use my 2 examples above to make it better. Plus, maybe you should make it longer