User blog comment:Brunettebraidsbooks/Story idea/@comment-27070860-20171215071658

Gah, I love this so far~

I really like the fact that you explain how and why Tiaco joined the phantoms and how he felt about it (it always bothers me when 'bad' characters are 'bad' just for the sake of being 'evil' without any actual motivation).

My only advice would be to throw chapters 1-3 into one longer chapter- there's no need to divide it up like that (unless you really want to, it's not a big deal).

I think you should post this as a page, more people might read it that way~

Good luck with the rest of the story, I'm really looking forward to it ^^