Talk:A New Ally/@comment-43678658-20200123005231

this was an interesting read! though a "forbidden romance" kind of plot is nothing new, i was intrigued by the concept of a phantom falling in love with an animal, especially since i took arro's feelings towards sylix as more of a fleeting infatuation than genuine love which always wins angst points in my book. even if you weren't aiming for that, i liked imagining it from that view.

i'm also interested by the war itself. i found the very carefully organized battles with an announcer mandating when they begin and (presumably) end a rather questionable event, which reminded me somewhat of a dystopian setting where such battles are controlled and organized in such a way. who is controlling them? is this some sort of government conspiracy kind of thing like a generic dystopian book where the government is organizing these battles to keep the phantoms and animals hating each other? am i looking too deeply into a minor detail? most likely. i'm always interested in the specifics of armies and wars, as it seemed a little bit glossed over in this story despite it being a major theme. i might just be blind though

i enjoyed reading, though i think it would help if the chapters were a bit longer. there didn't seem to be very much development between sylix and arro, and when there was, it felt a tad rushed, because of how short the chapters were, which might be why i got that "infatuation" vibe rather than genuine affection from arro. unless that was what you're going for, in which case i applaud you because it feels like everyone's too scared to go there.

overall, i liked this story, and it did a good job at holding my attention, despite feeling a bit rushed in some parts. good work!