Talk:Portraits/@comment-27070860-20191011151818

Woah, this was unsettling but enjoyable to read

I just want to praise you for making the character actually close their computer- I’ve read so many stories that could have just ended the second the game would’ve been turned off, or the computer unplugged. The masterpieces of the non-members gradually appearing before revealing the final work of art was quite climactic too.

If I were to nit-pick I’d point out a few errors that could probably be fixed if you’d re-read it a few more times, like;

‘The week of February the 7th (…)’-  not really sure were ‘the week’ part came from? I think you might have meant ‘On the day of February (…)’ or something like that. Also, you seem to have missed a comma in; ‘We our animals (…)’--> (We, our animals, (…)

But that’s just me being nit-picky, good story I liked it ^^