Talk:Life of a jammer/@comment-11573350-20141011224403

This is an okay start, but it needs a lot of work. For starters, the prologue is incredibly short and vague. Who is the Chosen one? Why does she have powers? Who is the Phantom King?

Another thing is that the grammar and spelling need to be corrected. I've edited this chapter so that it's correct, but you need to work on it.

A promising start, yes, but much work is needed.