Talk:Climbing Paws/@comment-43788761-20200117174509

Oh man oh man. I feel like this is going to become a compendium of horrors. I especially love the casual foreshadowing of Kahuela's death in the line " This wasn't Jamaa. Animals were not in harmony with each other, and the life of one outside of Jamaa is cruel and pulls no punches. Kahuela had to be careful, or else his mistake could lead to injury, or even death. ". I didn't notice it the first time, but on the second read I just thought "Oh cripes." I hope you continue these short stories (in the real-world sense; in the terms of this wiki they're of impressive length)! My only minor criticism is that occasionally there's a tense that's a tad wonky, but I only noticed them because of the second read. Well done!