Talk:Land of the free/@comment-30921738-20191206043157

It seems good so far, but odd that the soldiers were shooting their friends, allies and innocents, then smirking and appearing happy as they died. They don't really seem to be the heroes, they murdered Shiva's son after he surrendered and was already incapacitated and then married his mother?

Also, you keep using the wrong 'your'. 'You're' is short for 'you are', while 'your' isn't and represents ownership of something. Several times you should have said 'your' but said 'you're' instead.

Sorry if this came off as harsh, just giving you constructive criticism so you can improve your writing. The stories plot is very interesting and intriguing, there are just a few details that are off.