Talk:The dead jammer-creepypasta/@comment-28439145-20170611012019

This was unsettling and good enough to be considered a good creepypasta, but it was a teensy bit cliche and had quite a lot of grammar errors (not so much that it ruined the story, unlike some other creepypastas I've seen). Ack, I sound like I'm being mean, but I'm trying to give some constructive criticism XD

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