Talk:The New Spike-Broken Animals/@comment-38089370-20190115223442

Good story! A few grammar mistakes, though. Example:

Dire-wolves and saber-tooths where sworn enemies, right?

It should be:

Dire-wolves and saber-tooths were sworn enemies, right?

Another one:

The Forgotten Desert had taken to many things from Jamma, now it would take Heart.

It should be:

The Forgotten Desert had taken too many things from Jamma, now it would take Heart.

Just saying lol