Talk:The Next Generation/@comment-30921738-20191231232428

Wow, I really like it so far! It has a very interesting plot and good pacing, as well as a good amount of detail. However, there are a few things I would like to mention to help you improve this already amazing story.

First off, make sure to make a new paragraph whenever it changes subjects, or whenever someone starts talking. I noticed that MelonVandal mentioned this, but seeing as you hadn't done it already I decided to help out and do it for you. Another thing is that whenever someone is talking and it specifically says that at the end, do a comma instead of a period at the end. An example, since it's hard to explain:

What to do:

"I don't like that," she said.

"I don't like that," someone muttered.

What not to do:

''"I don't like it." she explained.''

''"I don't like it." someone muttered.''

But, if someone is talking and you begin to write about something else immediately afterward, add a period. Like this:

''"You shouldn't do that." She began to walk away, saying no more''.

Another thing you could do, but don't have to, is put their thoughts in italics, which is done by highlighting the secon of text and clicking the cursive i on the top of the editor. You can also change text to a heading for new chapters by clicking 'Paragraph' on top and changing it to 'Heading'.

Sorry if I appeared rude inw riting any of this- Your writing is very nice and me intentions were only to help you improve. Thank you for lostening, and good luck in writing more amazing content!