Talk:The Final Desolation/@comment-30921738-20190304225210

Some advice:

Don't just do a '&' when you are saying and, it just makes it seem like you are lazy.

When you said that they were fighting for 50 hours, it made it seem like they had been battling non-stop for a whole 2 days. I reccomend you rephrase it, such as saying "We have been on the move for 50 hours," or "We have been on the battlefield for 50 hours".

Also, at the end of chapter 6, Duchess uncheathed her katanas when she was talking. I noticed you just put it in parentheses, but if you want a more professional look, I would do this: ""If you wanna invade Phantom territory," she said as she unsheathed her katanas, "you do it yourself.""

Other than that, wonderful story!