Talk:Scotland/@comment-36740261-20191127210647

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why did you have to end on a cliffhanger

I love this story! It has a unique plot, and the names are unique. I find it to be interesting you bumped the wiki into the story too! I think it's cool that you named the chapters Acts rather than Chapters :)

Here's some constructive criticism: I find it kind of overwhelming that so much action happens at the same time, so I can't memorize what are the current problems in the story. It's like I'm sailing on the ocean, enjoying my adventure. Then all of a sudden, a storm starts out of nowhere, and many waves come to crash onto my boat. It tips over, and I fall into the ocean.

I also find the transitions to be like a slideshow, sudden and abrupt. One moment you're making a play, and the next moment a crazy kidnapper guy trespasses on your territory and you're hiding under the bed crying of fear.

Otherwise, I can't wait for more!