Talk:A Fox's Dream/@comment-26863232-20170116212126

It's pretty good, but I have some criticism. Plz don't hate meh  ;-;   I just wanna help

The chapters are rather short (something I do a lot). Try add some more discription of the background, the characters, etc. Also, the story is a bit too sad. making it seem a little like a 'mary sue' story because everything sucks for the protagonist.

Everything else is really good!! Again, please don't hate me  :D