Thread:Katenka Nowicki/@comment-32392816-20180611011228/@comment-31417255-20180611042718

To be honest, you're not that bad based on a couple of your stories that I read. Your stories aren't really scary, but your formatting is pretty good. The ending of your "How Could You?" story could use a little work, though, mainly the formatting of the dialogue in that part. The spacing out of the letters is pretty cringy and kinda jarring, and I'd suggest changing it.

Maybe change ’''"M y t u r n." growled Henrik after everyone had their fun with the wolf.’ to ’"My turn", growled Henrik, his voice ominously monotonous, after everyone had their fun with the wolf.''’

If monotone isn't what you were aiming for, the basic concept still work. Just replace "ominously monotonous" with whatever you're trying to convey (e.g. "his voice full of pure rage").

I'm glad to see one of you kids on here is actually looking to improve on their writing! If you keep your mind open to criticism and tips like that, your writing will improve.