Talk:Stranded/@comment-30921738-20190905221452

I'm really liking it so far! Not cliche, and a good pace. However, I would like a description of how Ally and Lara look. I would also like to see Laras motivation for sending her sister to the ocean to die. It seems a little too much. Perhaps the prank was meant to be harmless, like Lara wanted to tie her to a dock so she didn't drift away but the rope slipped. It also seems a little weird that she would post a YouTube video of her sending her sister to die. Then she would get in huge trouble and there would be obvious proof. I also think it would be good to have a little more detail in the beginning and more situations building up to the ultimate prank. Other than that, I'm really liking it! Looking forward to more!