Talk:Adopt me please.../@comment-27070860-20180102212501

I actually real like this- I enjoy the idea of the AJ animals having their own thoughts, not being controlled by their ‘humans’ all the time. I liked the characters too ^^

Although I could use some more creative dialog, the overall story is pretty nice ^^

What I’d advise though, is cut that block of text into paragraphs. It’ll make reading it easier and more appealing. Also, re-read your work, there’s a few typos here and there (‘thinkwhen’ should be separated, ‘(…) net to the pillow room’ should be ‘(…)next to the pillow room’- this are trivial things, but it’s worth re-reading to catch all of them~

Good luck with any future stories of yours~