Talk:The Next Generation/@comment-39615662-20191230220726

Quite interesting so far, but I suggest that you make a new line every time someone is speaking. It's much easier for the reader to understand, and it looks better aswell.

Also, perhaps it'd be more interesting if you'd describe the facial expressions in more depth? I personally enjoy stories where there's emphasis on facial expressions and emotions. Emotions usually play a big part in my writing, but you can do whatever you'd like; it's just my reccomendation.