Talk:Captive/@comment-31417255-20180709213704

This isn't bad, but the grammar needs work. Also, the part where people are randomly attacking and insulting the protagonist is unnecessarily dramatic. Instead, you should have a scene where the other characters simply walk by and ignore the protagonist's woes.

The art isn't bad either. It's not professional or anything, but it's cute and has charm. The no-outline style is a little jarring, but it's not too bad of a tactic to use if you can't get the hang drawing the legs on the other side of the character to where it doesn't look like they were born in Chernobyl.